Okay first off I had a major issue reading this book. All of the text was in a 2 line, 1 blank line format. Effectively for every line of text, whether it was dialogue, description, car
chase or anything like that, this is how it appeared. It was extremely distracting and annoying. I probably missed several key points because of this. Might have been the
way the pdf showed on my kindle, but god was it hard to read through.
Still with that out of the way, I did manage to read the book. It concerns a young barman called Donovan who, after being ditched by his girl, finds himself wanting more from life. Some stranger tells him to look in a locked room upstairs, which he does and finds a necklace. Another comes in and tells him about the vampires that rule Wall Street and who his Uncle Shaun got rid of. Not long after this tale, a bunch of Wall Street traders walk into this Brooklyn bar (as they do) to drink. These traders are awfully impressed that Donovan can add up really quickly and one of them, Drake, is pale and dead looking. Some local gang bangers try to rob the place, Donovan and these traders stop them and purely because he can mentally work out sums in his head, dead looking guy offers him a job. He accepts and goes to work. From then on the book is about Donovan learning the ropes, pining after his girl, dressing really badly and lots of 'Sell...sell...buy...buy'. Oh and the vampires, cos Uncle Shaun's crazy buddy was right and the vampires rule Wall Street.
There is other stuff but I don't want to spoil the book. I managed to finish Vampires of Wall Street and it was reasonably written, however it needed better pacing and a decent editor. The book was supposed to be Donovan's tempting to the vamp side but it was badly handled. I have no idea why Raven was suddenly in love, particularly as she was the honey trap and her overwrought declaration of this was awful:
No... I can't do it! I care about you too much. I don't want you to be a vampire. A freak like me! Go!
There were some really good ideas in here, but it was badly handled and needed a good deal more. My advice is to go back to the text and add more foreshadowing, a better buildup and just more oomph. This could be a really good book, it just needs more emotion. I don't really feel for Donovan or know him. All of the secondary characters are interchangeable. There should have been more mystery about the vampires. It would have been better if the Uncle Shaun, vampire slayer bit didn't happen.
For now 2 stars..
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chase or anything like that, this is how it appeared. It was extremely distracting and annoying. I probably missed several key points because of this. Might have been the
way the pdf showed on my kindle, but god was it hard to read through.
Still with that out of the way, I did manage to read the book. It concerns a young barman called Donovan who, after being ditched by his girl, finds himself wanting more from life. Some stranger tells him to look in a locked room upstairs, which he does and finds a necklace. Another comes in and tells him about the vampires that rule Wall Street and who his Uncle Shaun got rid of. Not long after this tale, a bunch of Wall Street traders walk into this Brooklyn bar (as they do) to drink. These traders are awfully impressed that Donovan can add up really quickly and one of them, Drake, is pale and dead looking. Some local gang bangers try to rob the place, Donovan and these traders stop them and purely because he can mentally work out sums in his head, dead looking guy offers him a job. He accepts and goes to work. From then on the book is about Donovan learning the ropes, pining after his girl, dressing really badly and lots of 'Sell...sell...buy...buy'. Oh and the vampires, cos Uncle Shaun's crazy buddy was right and the vampires rule Wall Street.
There is other stuff but I don't want to spoil the book. I managed to finish Vampires of Wall Street and it was reasonably written, however it needed better pacing and a decent editor. The book was supposed to be Donovan's tempting to the vamp side but it was badly handled. I have no idea why Raven was suddenly in love, particularly as she was the honey trap and her overwrought declaration of this was awful:
No... I can't do it! I care about you too much. I don't want you to be a vampire. A freak like me! Go!
There were some really good ideas in here, but it was badly handled and needed a good deal more. My advice is to go back to the text and add more foreshadowing, a better buildup and just more oomph. This could be a really good book, it just needs more emotion. I don't really feel for Donovan or know him. All of the secondary characters are interchangeable. There should have been more mystery about the vampires. It would have been better if the Uncle Shaun, vampire slayer bit didn't happen.
For now 2 stars..
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