Eiara is a normal teen living in the Kingdom of Patico. After being moved with her family to a new district, she finds that outside of making new friends and going to school, strange things are happening both to her and to the kingdom. Who can she trust?
I found this book interesting, with a world that needed more exploration and a main character who could have been fascinating. Let's start with the good: The world is interesting and it's nice to see a 'hidden' dysotopia. There is no obvious oppression in this world, everything works and the writer has managed to drop enough hints of underlying trouble that grabs the imagination. I liked the fact that it wasn't a 'dead parent' scenario. Having a main character with both parents living is unique in YA and I appreciated that. The main character has potential and I liked reading about her.
However the above is not helped by poor editing. There are several issues that really let this book down. The main character is introduced to her 'love triangle' interests with no subtlety, they may as well have been carrying 'love interest' badges. There is also no build up in the relationships, I have no idea of what the main character thinks about these two guys, particularly when they're suddenly kissing, and I'm supposed to be in her head. The main character mentions far too late an important fact about herself and almost as an afterthought. Similarly other characters spill the 'I have special powers me' beans for no discernible reason. There are also a number of typos and grammatical errors which could have been picked up earlier.
Don't get me wrong, I did enjoy what I read, but it's disappointing when it has the potential to be so much more. I would strongly recommend that the author approach someone to edit her text, not just for typos but for readability. A good editor will help the pacing problems and issues mentioned above.
Shedloads of potential, let down by poor editing.
***
I found this book interesting, with a world that needed more exploration and a main character who could have been fascinating. Let's start with the good: The world is interesting and it's nice to see a 'hidden' dysotopia. There is no obvious oppression in this world, everything works and the writer has managed to drop enough hints of underlying trouble that grabs the imagination. I liked the fact that it wasn't a 'dead parent' scenario. Having a main character with both parents living is unique in YA and I appreciated that. The main character has potential and I liked reading about her.
However the above is not helped by poor editing. There are several issues that really let this book down. The main character is introduced to her 'love triangle' interests with no subtlety, they may as well have been carrying 'love interest' badges. There is also no build up in the relationships, I have no idea of what the main character thinks about these two guys, particularly when they're suddenly kissing, and I'm supposed to be in her head. The main character mentions far too late an important fact about herself and almost as an afterthought. Similarly other characters spill the 'I have special powers me' beans for no discernible reason. There are also a number of typos and grammatical errors which could have been picked up earlier.
Don't get me wrong, I did enjoy what I read, but it's disappointing when it has the potential to be so much more. I would strongly recommend that the author approach someone to edit her text, not just for typos but for readability. A good editor will help the pacing problems and issues mentioned above.
Shedloads of potential, let down by poor editing.
***
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